{"id":2358,"date":"2012-05-09T19:44:29","date_gmt":"2012-05-09T07:44:29","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/?p=2358"},"modified":"2012-05-09T19:44:29","modified_gmt":"2012-05-09T07:44:29","slug":"goodbye-my-feleni-revised-first-draft","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/goodbye-my-feleni-revised-first-draft\/","title":{"rendered":"GOODBYE MY FELENI:  Revised First Draft"},"content":{"rendered":"<p>For some reason &#8211; and it&#8217;s not just my usual laziness &#8211; the idea of revision has, of late, been quite a mountain to climb.  As if it wasn&#8217;t bad enough circling a blank screen, approaching a draft with revisory intent always makes me think of that saying about dogs and their vomit.<\/p>\n<p>A script doesn&#8217;t get better on itself, but.<\/p>\n<p>So.  I took the notes I was given from the read-through, some more from the director hisself, and some of my own, and tried to integrate those that were most applicable (ie., felt right) into the next iteration of the draft.<\/p>\n<p>If nothing else, it&#8217;s making more sense.  It&#8217;s jumped from 33 pages to 37 pages but that&#8217;s okay.  The director is not afraid to cut lines and stuff whether I&#8217;m in the room sobbing or not.<\/p>\n<p>I used to wonder what a &#8220;revised first draft&#8221; meant.  I used to think it was virtually identical to the first draft &#8211; it just had all the typos ironed out.  As far as feature scripts were concerned, the definition could <a href=\"http:\/\/complicationsensue.blogspot.co.nz\/2008\/01\/revised-first-draft-walks-into-bar.html\" target=\"_blank\">vary<\/a>, depending on the producer.<\/p>\n<p>But with this project, my wearing the writer <i>and<\/i> co-producer hats means that a <i>revised first draft<\/i> is whatever I damned well say it is.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>For some reason &#8211; and it&#8217;s not just my usual laziness &#8211; the idea of revision has, of late, been quite a mountain to climb. As if it wasn&#8217;t bad enough circling a blank screen, approaching a draft with revisory intent always makes me think of that saying about dogs and their vomit. A script &hellip; <\/p>\n<p class=\"link-more\"><a href=\"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/goodbye-my-feleni-revised-first-draft\/\" class=\"more-link\">Continue reading<span class=\"screen-reader-text\"> &#8220;GOODBYE MY FELENI:  Revised First Draft&#8221;<\/span><\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"_exactmetrics_skip_tracking":false,"_exactmetrics_sitenote_active":false,"_exactmetrics_sitenote_note":"","_exactmetrics_sitenote_category":0,"advanced_seo_description":"","jetpack_seo_html_title":"","jetpack_seo_noindex":false,"jetpack_post_was_ever_published":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_access":"","_jetpack_dont_email_post_to_subs":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_tier_id":0,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paywalled_content":false,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paid_content":false,"footnotes":"","_links_to":"","_links_to_target":""},"categories":[4,23],"tags":[244,245,246,247],"class_list":["post-2358","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-scriptwriting","category-theatre","tag-goodbye-my-feleni","tag-herald-theatre","tag-revised-first-draft","tag-the-edge"],"jetpack_featured_media_url":"","jetpack_likes_enabled":true,"jetpack_sharing_enabled":true,"jetpack-related-posts":[],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/2358","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=2358"}],"version-history":[{"count":0,"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/2358\/revisions"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=2358"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=2358"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/dfmamea.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=2358"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}